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Post by alek on Oct 2, 2012 19:37:38 GMT -5
One day during a rainy night, Alec was born. Him and his family lived in A poor village. They couldn't afford hardly any food, So they stole food from other houses. Alec didn't like raiding houses. Every time before they'd raid a house, they would need to make weapons. Alec would always stay home because he knew raiding other people is wrong. One day, they were tracked down, and Alec's parents were arrested, and Alec was forced to be separated from his parents. The police threw Alec in the forest and drove away. Alec hunted by himself everyday. One day when he was hunting, A giant grizzly bear came in front of Alec and attacked him! The Bear disappeared into the forest, leaving Alec A bloody mess. Alec was badly injured, And his arm was almost separated from his body. He tries to find somebody for help. After months of pain, he finds a house. He knocks on the door and a man opens it. He says "hello sir, please come in". Alec goes inside the house and he sits on a chair. The man gives Alec a cast and some bandages to stop the bleeding. Alec says "thank you for helping me out". "No problem" says the man. Years pass, all the wounds are completely healed. Alec starts carving his own crossbow. Alec finds a town called "Rull". Alec thought the town looked fine to live in, so he rents a house there. He was only 16, so he thought "it takes guts to go what i've been through".
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Shawn Benoit
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Post by Shawn Benoit on Oct 2, 2012 23:18:37 GMT -5
Good start. I would advise adding more paragraphs and stories to flesh out your character.
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on Oct 3, 2012 3:13:42 GMT -5
That level of injury would render the loss of your arm even with modern medical techniques. Thus, unless if the stranger was a powerful practitioner of magic your character would be one-armed.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Oct 8, 2012 12:02:35 GMT -5
Months of your arm nearly severed? Surely it would have succumbed to gangrene or you would have suffered from a life threatening infection. Fix this bit... Also, no bears. Some other nasty can injure you, but you will want to lessen the severity so you're not called stumpy or something from losing that arm.
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