Brodalio.Viking

[magnus2142]

My name is Brodalio Viking. I am a dwarf living in a ordinary city.

I was known as the best fighter in town. I was respected and nice.
One day, i had a dream. It was about the city was going to be attacked.
He did go to hes good friend. The friend was a vise man. That is the reasen Brodalio did go to him. The vise man said after what he had heard: Oh, NO!

This can only mean that we need to prepare to war against the skeletons!
We need to prepare to battle. Said Brodalio. The war was going to be in 2 weeks.
In that 2 weeks they trained and trained. Brodalio and hes army was ready for war. After 2 weeks, the war started! Brodalio was goin into a group og skeletons and started to spin hes axe around to the skeletons was dead.
The war was going good for the dwarfs until..... the giant skeleton boss comed!

The dwarfs was speechless. Brodalio to, but Brodalio got a plan. He runned to the skeleton boss with hes axe raised, cut the legs of and make the skeleton boss fall. After that all the dwarfs started to attack it and Brodalio Viking and hes army knew they had won the war.

Brodalio Viking was now the king of the city for the job he did.
The End.


My ingame-name is going to be: Brodalio.Viking

Magnus2142

[fireblitz223]

Lots of spelling errors and some parts don't make sense like "to spin hes (his*) axe around to the skeletons was dead". This has a lot of basic grammatical errors fix it. "It was about the city going to be attacked", all these paragraphs and grammar need fixing.

Just some tips on making your bio a lot better and a lot quicker to be accepted

[Brindale]

Bit of the stereotypical "I kilt it and now I king hurhur" in it. Make it like "respected" or "acknowledged" instead of "I'm king suckers." Also, like blitz said, fix up the grammar, tenses, and general spelling errors.

[joshivar]

Could be better. I appreciate you not having to avenge your bandit-killed parents and having a fairly normal life. I do have to say though that being 'the best fighter in town' is unlikely unless you are the only one. Dwarves are a strong, tough, stoic people who love their craft and battle, anyone boasting to be the best would be challenged daily to brawls. Have a bit of modesty.

[Rowan.Pelanger]

You said Vise man a few times for some reason... Don't you mean wise man