Velocitas Eradico

[Shawn Benoit]

Velocitas Eradico-The Rogue Experiment

Description: Velocitas Eradico (formerly Helis Chronodancer) is a rogue elf that participated in Project Scopulus, a private experiment that applied growth magic into the sensory cortex of a test subject, and also tried to activate the latent magic that lied in every elf’s blood. The experiment went halfway into the process before Elven police crashed the private chamber, and shutting down the room Helis was in. Presumed dead, he was trashed in a river, and woke up in a forest near Archonfel. He didn’t remember a thing, besides hearing the distinct term, "Velocitas Eradico", a couple of times. Putting two and two together, he forged a new name: Velocitas Eradico. Eradico soon discovered that he could build up lots and lots of momentum when he's attacking. With every attack that connects fluidly, the attacks get stronger and stronger, knocking everyone else away with ease, possibly due to a magical aura that surrounds him when he runs, due to the experiment’s process. However, if he stops for even half a second, the combo will stop completely, and Velocitas will have to start again. For some reason (after being hired to kill a rogue necromancer) he can’t break magical spells, and he could also get hurt by enchanted weapons. It is speculated that if Project Apollyon wasn’t shut down, the Elf might have the momentum charge too strong to the point where it could make him catch on fire due to friction. He uses a diamond battleaxe, and a personal set of armour called the Juggernaut, which further enhances his momentum charge.

Strengths:
-I'M THE JUGGERNAUT, BITCH!
-If he's allowed to build up momentum for an extended period of time, then curbstomps happen. EVERYWHERE.
-Complete monster in close combat.
-Can steal inertia to a limited degree.

Weaknesses:
-Can’t hit anything magical. Even if it’s an enchanted arrow/blade/axe.
-Horrible against vampires, since they’re basically made of magic. Or any other magical creature, for that matter. Endermen, werewolves, unicorns, demons…the list goes on.
-If he stops for a second, the combo will completely stop.

Stories are coming later, in separate posts.

NOTE: Yeah, the Juggernaut will be enchanted diamond armour, and I'll be using a lot of potions. And sometimes my fists.

[pajosftw]

1: Seems again, overpowered on the brink of god-mod.

2: You seem to be the master of a lot of things. It's like everyone reveres you.

3: I foresee this character entailing you tossing things at people a lot and declaring them dead.

4: Is it possible for you to be more condescending?

[Shawn Benoit]

Mar 8, 2012 19:46:38 GMT -5 pajosftw said:

1: Seems again, overpowered on the brink of god-mod.

2: You seem to be the master of a lot of things. It's like everyone reveres you.

3: I foresee this character entailing you tossing things at people a lot and declaring them dead.

4: Is it possible for you to be more condescending?

1. Really?

2. Just throwing things.

3. Bleed and cripple

4. Define.

[Shawn Benoit]

Mar 8, 2012 19:48:11 GMT -5 Shawn Benoit said:

Mar 8, 2012 19:46:38 GMT -5 pajosftw said:

1: Seems again, overpowered on the brink of god-mod.

2: You seem to be the master of a lot of things. It's like everyone reveres you.

3: I foresee this character entailing you tossing things at people a lot and declaring them dead.

4: Is it possible for you to be more condescending?

1. Really?


2. Just throwing things.


3. Bleed and cripple

4. Define.

I guess I'll take out the engineering thing. And the playing cards are primarily injuring tools, sometimes it can kill, but those were untrained bandits, not assassins, vampires, or mages.

[lucavex]

I have added notes to the primary area of your bio to point out flaws in inaccuracies.

Description and abilities: A Dark elf (There are no Dark Elves in Mirugan. If you really ARE a dark elf, you must explain how and why you came to Mirugan.) adventurer, half-time mercenary, and talented engineer, Nassor Illumia had a talent for Atrikato, the art of throwing anything, primarily playing cards (You are not Gambit.) as weapons. Over the years, he became the most accurate thrower in his lands (You insist on being the "the best" at something, or having some sort of gimmick. Not possible.) Tests by the Dark elves have shown that Nassor has superior reflexes and hand-eye coordination, making more lethal then many other Elves (Again, you can't just write yourself to be the best ever.) He can throw almost anything with lethality, from glass to coins, from blaze rods to bones. His favorite weapons, however, are flint shards and the traditional playing card. Nassor also studied the art of Misdirection and also studied Engineering in his spare time. He puts his distraction techniques well in battle, earning him the nickname "The master of Misdirection."(I R TEH MASTOR OF STUF) Nassor currently resides in Fringea, after he assisted the townspeople there in fighting off a force of bandits. He distrusts the crossbow, saying that it's too slow for his liking. Like all Dark Elves, he can maintain great bursts of speed, making him almost a blur for 2-5 seconds (You can have this ability when you demonstrate to me how you accomplish this in game. Hint: The skill is called "One") Although less skilled in it, he is also a good shot with a bow, and he is working on archery in his spare time. He also has a Cloak of Illumination, breaking up his outline when he runs. (No, no you don't. I don't have a "rubber dong of infinite penetration", you can't have a cloak of illumination.) Here is the story of his assistance in fighting off bandits.

Your story of fighting off bandits shows to prove that you intend on making this new character a hybrid of gambit, and legolas.

Try making a character devoid a gimmick. You don't NEED a gimmick to make a compelling character. My character started off as simply a kindly old doctor. Now look where he's at. Your story evolves as you play the world, and interact with people. You can't simply write yourself to be epic from very start. You have to work for it, and evolve slowly, over time.

Insert Coin To Continue.

[alwayzbored114]

Nass0r, the key thing your missing here is Role Play Plot and growth. You start your character as a bad ass master. Where can you go from there? You cant get better than a master. Also, all of your RP characters so far are overpowered, as Pajos said. The only way you could toss things at people is through /a, which is AGAIN, god-modding.

condescending : stubbornly needing to be the best at everything. You are just another RP character, not the Legendary 4, not the General, nothing special yet. Dont try to skip to #1

www.ageofcitycraft.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=rp&action=display&thread=921


EDIT: Uhh, I started this before Luca's and ended after..... so read his too XD

[Shawn Benoit]

Sorry guys. I'm not the best at balancing things out. Luca and alwayz, thanks for your input, but can't I just bind bleed and harmtouch to flint and glass and call that my throwing objects?

[lucavex]

I never said there was problem with you lobbing glass and flint. Just playing cards. All things aside though, that is the smallest problem with your bio.

[Shawn Benoit]

Okay, I think I fixed most of the things.

[sbongkh]

I am a dark elf... Check my bio - search Valfor Alfajson, so yes Luca, there is ONE dark elf in Mirugan.

Wait a sec... At the start you say you're human. How did you turn into a Dark Elf?!

[Orman Grandclaw]

Nassor-if you want to say you are the best at anything, you will need the back it up with real skills. I can write that I am an acomplished engineer because I really happen to be good and building/redstone and I have alot of previous works to prove it.
Oh and sbongkh, I want to talk to you personally about Elves and Dark Elves-I wish to add it to my works.

Edit: Also, note that I described myself as "acomplished" as opposed to the best, since no one can be "the best" at anything-everyone has a different way of doing things. Even Mikey, being awsome at PVP, cannot claim that he is invincible-since even he can fall into a TNT trap.

[Shawn Benoit]

Mar 9, 2012 5:14:42 GMT -5 sbongkh said:

I am a dark elf... Check my bio - search Valfor Alfajson, so yes Luca, there is ONE dark elf in Mirugan.

Wait a sec... At the start you say you're human. How did you turn into a Dark Elf?!

I changed it.

[pajosftw]

Mar 9, 2012 10:25:21 GMT -5 Orman Grandclaw said:

Nassor-if you want to say you are the best at anything, you will need the back it up with real skills. I can write that i am an acomplished engineer because I really happen to be good and building/redstone and I have alot of previous works to prove it.

Oh and sbongkh, I want to talk to you personally about Elves and Dark Elves-I wish to add it to my works.

Me too. High five for being awesome at engineering!

[deltajesus]

I can say I'm pretty good at enchanting, but I still haven't put it in my bio, wanting to be the best or even just really skilled is just plain childish.

[Orman Grandclaw]

Mar 9, 2012 12:02:43 GMT -5 pajosftw said:

Mar 9, 2012 10:25:21 GMT -5 Orman Grandclaw said:

Nassor-if you want to say you are the best at anything, you will need the back it up with real skills. I can write that i am an acomplished engineer because I really happen to be good and building/redstone and I have alot of previous works to prove it.

Oh and sbongkh, I want to talk to you personally about Elves and Dark Elves-I wish to add it to my works.

Me too. High five for being awesome at engineering!

High Five as well.