2nd Application

[corkajbs]

Ulfman.IronHammer was a stout Hammer man, carrying on the profession of his clan. While originally from Nakisgoden, which was in the center of the planet, he would need to go to the establishment of Olon Sterus to begin his quest, as that was closer to the forest of Thala Forile. Ekdikitis was one of the most skillful of all the dwarves from his hometown. He was incredibly tough, had super strength and amazing self-healing capacity. He was what you thought of when you said “Dwarf”. Except, he could dodge better than most Dwarves.

But that aside, he was a spectacular axe dwarf and quite talented as a fighter. Ulfman.IronHammer was ready.

Ekdikitis was well equipped with an iron battle Hammer and a dwarven steel shield. Seeing as the elders knew he was unskilled in the use of armor, he was only given enough clothing to survive the winter by Thala Forile. He knew well of the perils a’Sitari had faced, because he had studied her tale many times over. Ekdikitis knew he would bring a full band when it was his time to confront the goblins and face his true destiny!

[lobuscusthegreat]

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[Shezz Raulo]

Needs to be longer, More descriptive and your god modding a little, "Incredibly tough, Super strength and amazing self healing". You also say out of the blue "to confront the goblins and face his true destiny" You have said nothing about these "goblins" and how they affect you.

[Rei.Blackwind]

This bio leaves us with much to be desired. There are lots of names being tossed about of places that do not exist in Mirugan, therefore have little to no meaning to us. If you want to add in some of your own lore and have it to where you somehow ended up in Mirugan, that is fine, but please give us an idea of what the heck you are talking about. And Shezza, I think the guy he was describing is someone else he was going to fight with.. or something... not really sure. Because of all the throwing around of names of places and things with no descriptions of what they are, the bio is hard to keep up with in continuity.

I don't recall there being any goblins in our lands, so this too doesn't really fit the server lore. You may want to rewrite it to give a better idea of your lore and then somehow make an interesting reason of how/why you were removed from your lands and ended up here. If you don't want to do that, then I suggest you take a look at some of the established server lore and try to integrate yourself into it. An ideal town for you might be Cliffside? It's a very industrial town and I always think of dwarves being the industrial type.

See what you can to do fit in better with our server lore. Use the modify button at the top right of this post to change your bio rather than writing a whole different post. Good luck!