character

[badmanbus]

Race: a being of the old ways

my character comes from a far of land. he is a being of the old ways he was born into a tribe of fighters and hunters. as he grew he started to become more and more detached from his tribe. his father taught him to fight but he never enjoyed it as much as his friends and brothers. on quiet days when the wind swirled throughout the normanic hills he would climb to the highest peak and sit there with the breeze rushing throughout the hair. on those hills he learnt to control the elements around him. At last on his ritual day he fled from his tribe wanting to seek a new life. at last he arrived in a new land and settled there aiming to start a huge farm that he hopes will prosper.

[bobruk098]

Couple things: Capitalization. No joke, in order to get it approved the capitalizing, grammar, and spelling needs to be great. Make it longer. What land did you come from, what old ways were you taught in what tribe. Control the elements? Does this mean your a mage? What new life were you seeking and why? Lastly, what land did you arrive at?
Answer these questions in great detail, describing each thing. Make it interesting and a fun read.

[Rei.Blackwind]

Apr 6, 2012 9:55:54 GMT -5 bobruk098 said:

Couple things: Capitalization. No joke, in order to get it approved the capitalizing, grammar, and spelling needs to be great. Make it longer. What land did you come from, what old ways were you taught in what tribe. Control the elements? Does this mean your a mage? What new life were you seeking and why? Lastly, what land did you arrive at?
Answer these questions in great detail, describing each thing. Make it interesting and a fun read.

I completed agree with what Bobruk said. Additionally, the title of the bio needs to be the first and last name of your character. I do not even SEE a character name in this that you desire. Come up with a first and last name, put it as your title, fix the capitalization issues, add some more info, and let us know so we can look it over again! Please use the modify button at the top right of your post to make the changes. Good luck!

[deltajesus]

I'm just waiting for ig to go through all the bios and say incorrect format again.