ildos magaia firen-bio

[imf10]

*remastered*

Ildos magaia firen.

I remember it well, I was created far far away in the lands of Kituria.
My dad, a powerful mage created me by using magic clay and pork chops. (he called me porky..)

He watched over me and taught me magic, he took me to distant lands to learn me
how to help and trade. We always used portals, hardly no walking at all. I came to lands
Of fire and lava filled with huge flying monsters and zombie pigs?
Lands of floating islands, that seemed to defile the gravity it self.
And then I saw a very strange land with giant black pillars inhabited by a strange tall black people
My dad called them Enderians.

I met a girl on one of my travels she was 18 years old and I fell in love with her.
She had beautiful long blonde hair and the most lovely smile ever.
But even though I was just 5, I still had the size and mind of an adult, and I knew I wanted her.
Before I could get close to her I was dragged back home….

Back to the books… the cauldron… my mind was not there only my body.

After some years, my dad was assaulted by a gang of rogues, he managed to fight them off
And ran back home.
In the middle of the night, a rogue managed to sneak into my room and kidnapped me. He was clearly fascinated of my scars and magic.
And he was astonished that he could see the magic flowing in my veins and it’s glowing through my clothes.

I was with the rouge for some months, I did not eat much, even though he gave me bread everyday. But everyday I gave half of it to a chicken that always came by. After some time it got used to me and was not afraid of me. Then one day I lured it to peck my ropes. And I got free and made his house burst into flames.
I took the chicken and ran back to the tower. It was destroyed… I found a portal and activated it, I went through and suddenly I stood in a big city called Rull


i won't change what my dad called the endermans, cuz that's what he called them anywho i think i got it all

[alwayzbored114]

Learned should be Taught

Captialize all of the "I"s

Capitalize Kituria

should be "My Dad, a powerful mage, created..."

After "Hardly no walking at all." should be a period

Zombie Pigs shouldn't have a ? after it, and have a . after it instead

Re-Write the "Lands of floating gravity" to "Lands of floating earth"

The Endrites are just called Endermen

Third line of the 3rd paragraph should be "But even though I was just 5, I still had the size and mind of an adult, and I knew I wanted her.

"After some years, my..... gang of rogues, but he managed.... and run back home"

"(New Sentence) In the middle of the night, a rogue....."

the "He was astonished" and "That he could see" should be on one line

"Its glowing through my clothes"

"I was WITH the rogues FOR some months"

"I did not EAT much, even though he gave me bread everyday. But, I would give half of it to a chicken..."

"not afraid of me. Then One day, I lured it to peck at the ropes binding my hands"

"When I got free, I made his house burst into flames"

"I went through, and suddenly"

Mkay, thats pretty much every gramatical error in there :b If you dont speak English very well, I hope you still have a good time on AoC. Good luck

[Shezz Raulo]

^Ditto^

[deltajesus]

A gang of reds? It's spelt rogue not rouge. Also it's spelt through not thru (unless you're at a fast food restaurant).