Shadowknife

[rhagfyr29]

I'm Shadowknife and this is my story,

When i was two years old my mother and father were caught trying to set fire to the castle they were executed for treason,I was taken to an orphanage it was a crooked building in the middle of a forest.
I was treated badly they hit me and made me do all the work while the other children got to play and have fun i was the outcast i endured eight years of abuse until i finally ran away.I made a home in a big cave.I swore i would get my revenge I would finish the work of my parents I would take down the kingdom,When I was fifteen I finally went back to the orphanage and murdered the head of the orphanage,the people call me shadowknife for I move about in the shadows I only kill victims with a black knife.I finally became a outlaw.......

[Aura.Blackwind]

A bit of god modding at the end, fix the punctuation, and make it a bit longer. Check some of the accepted character bios and try again.

[deltajesus]

Most famous outlaw ever that we've only just heard of? And the whole "I am an orphan and I get revenge for dead parents" thing is so stupidly overplayed no-one wants to read a story about it anymore.

[alwayzbored114]

Although that was pretty harsh, Delta's right :\

[Rei.Blackwind]

I see you made some modifications. The god modding is removed, so that is good. Shadowknife can maybe be your last name, but it is not a first. Come up with a first name. There are still some capitalization and punctuation issues as well. Please correct. Also the orphan thing is really horribly outplayed but if that is REALLY all you can come up with....

[Mackenzie.Heinzer]

What parent in the right mind calls there kid Shadowknife? please try again by using the edit button.

[Alcemere/Leonardo]

Why on earth would your parents try and set a castle on fire? And which kingdom are you talking about?

[deltajesus]

First of all grinch, you really don't need to keep adding things onto what Hockey's said. And secondly ever heard of revolution? Sometimes people just don't like their leaders.

[Alcemere/Leonardo]

Ahh what ever. We were at school doing this and I just wanted to follow up on what he said. (yes, hockey and I are good friends in real life.) Second, yeah your right I forgot about that at the time.

[Orman Grandclaw]

I wonder why human keep bothering to have children, when the birth of their child is the herald that they would be terminated before the child in question leaves infancy.

[WILD_PICKLE]

His name sounds like a transformer

[deltajesus]

And now we need a random noob to create a transformers bio.