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Post by demon113 on Apr 18, 2012 19:07:26 GMT -5
I'm Luke Frey's younger brother. I'm 16, I live in his home castle Larisia. I'm good with wires, (redstone) so if you need help, just come to me. I'm also very sneaky, so if you ever need any dirty work done to your enemies, I'm here. That is it for my bio.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Apr 18, 2012 19:12:44 GMT -5
This needs some more work. It's exceptionally short and gives little to no information about your character. Please put a little more effort into it and give us some more background.  Take a look at some of the good accepted bios, such as Mine, or Nightslash's, or Lucavex's, etc etc. |
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naqu6
Tree Puncher
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Post by naqu6 on Apr 22, 2012 18:03:40 GMT -5
Yes i agree with aku.Make it longer.Put more information in it.I dont have a clue who your "Caleb Frey" is.
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Post by Aura.Blackwind on Apr 22, 2012 18:25:05 GMT -5
Yes i agree with aku.Make it longer.Put more information in it.I dont have a clue who your "Caleb Frey" is. Dude, ever heard of this thing called grammar? |
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Post by deltajesus on Apr 22, 2012 19:05:48 GMT -5
Also I don't think you really need to post and agree with what Aku sais, she does it to us because she is officially saying that what we say is correct.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Apr 22, 2012 19:19:30 GMT -5
Also I don't think you really need to post and agree with what Aku sais, she does it to us because she is officially saying that what we say is correct. Exactly.  Needs someone official to comment for posts to be altered and all that jazz. |
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Post by deltajesus on Apr 22, 2012 20:56:06 GMT -5
Maybe if you just made me and night able to accept bios...
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on Apr 23, 2012 4:48:52 GMT -5
Extend word-count by a factor of at least 10. Consider it to be situation where you have to either achieve A* or face death by detention from the English teacher.
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naqu6
Tree Puncher
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Post by naqu6 on Apr 23, 2012 20:17:05 GMT -5
Yes i agree with aku.Make it longer.Put more information in it.I dont have a clue who your "Caleb Frey" is. Dude, ever heard of this thing called grammar? are u talking to me? because idc about grammar |
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Post by Aura.Blackwind on Apr 24, 2012 0:07:44 GMT -5
Dude, ever heard of this thing called grammar? are u talking to me? because idc about grammar It's a forums rule. Now let's take this to private messages if you feel the need to continue. |
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Post by deltajesus on Apr 24, 2012 18:35:02 GMT -5
I forgot to mention this earlier but naqu you have no reason to be posting on bios if you don't care about grammar, one of the main rules of writing a character bio.
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Post by Alcemere/Leonardo on Apr 26, 2012 12:04:32 GMT -5
I have a thing for detail and this could use a bit more.
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Take a look at some of the good accepted bios, such as Mine, or Nightslash's, or Lucavex's, etc etc.
Needs someone official to comment for posts to be altered and all that jazz.
