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Post by ncrt10 on Apr 28, 2012 1:59:39 GMT -5
ok one not realy in first.last name format because he dosent have a last name
second the name is italian and the translated version is hope dark the warrior of chaos
now third is the bio lot a realy long one (i would like to have the most creative posabilitys in the rp) once just a normal man who drempt of great warriors of both the light and the dark fighting mighty battles and one day he decided to fight along the warriors of his dreams and so his path to a warrior begins
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Post by deltajesus on Apr 28, 2012 6:55:45 GMT -5
This just isn't a bio at all. Firstly I doubt the name will fit, try using just Santobuio Guerriero. Secondly the third paragraph made little to no sense. And thirdly this gave no information about who your character is or what they're like, take a long look at the accepted character bios and try again.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Apr 28, 2012 14:38:04 GMT -5
Delta summed it up. This is awful.
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Post by Shezz Raulo on Apr 28, 2012 18:41:31 GMT -5
Yuh what AKU sais is truee
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Post by deltajesus on Apr 28, 2012 19:29:05 GMT -5
Yuh what AKU sais is truee What you just did is agreed with someone agreeing with something. |
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Post by Lunair.Blackwind on Apr 28, 2012 20:24:23 GMT -5
I havent even been on... and I'm STILL pulled into what illiterate noobs mistakenly call "Bios" Even though anyone who's done a half decent RP can tell you it's not near being one.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Apr 29, 2012 12:13:07 GMT -5
I havent even been on... and I'm STILL pulled into what illiterate noobs mistakenly call "Bios" Even though anyone who's done a half decent RP can tell you it's not near being one. There there... You can kill him later. ; p |
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on Apr 29, 2012 14:21:31 GMT -5
You should:
-Correct all grammar mistakes. There is a wonderful thing called the full-stop that existed in many European languages for over a thousand years.
-Correct all spelling mistakes. Ever heard of the glorious thing called "spellchecker" that exists in a very commonly used computer software called "Word"?
-Extend the word-count by at least a factor of six. Whats the point of living if you can't be bothered to do anything up to standard?
-Give more description about what your character is. So you are a "Dark Warrior of Chaos", WTF is that supposed to mean?
-Get Bent
Happy correcting.
Edit:
Actually, observing your age on your profile, I'll be a bit more lenient with my comments.
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Post by piwii999 on May 2, 2012 22:24:28 GMT -5
You should:
-Correct all grammar mistakes. There is a wonderful thing called the full-stop that existed in many European languages for over a thousand years.
-Correct all spelling mistakes. Ever heard of the glorious thing called "spellchecker" that exists in a very commonly used computer software called "Word"?
-Extend the word-count by at least a factor of six. Whats the point of living if you can't be bothered to do anything up to standard?
-Give more description about what your character is. So you are a "Dark Warrior of Chaos", WTF is that supposed to mean?
-Get Bent
Happy correcting.Edit: Actually, observing your age on your profile, I'll be a bit more lenient with my comments. hey Im 12 and when I wrote my story you liked it! |
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on May 3, 2012 5:42:54 GMT -5
You should:
-Correct all grammar mistakes. There is a wonderful thing called the full-stop that existed in many European languages for over a thousand years.
-Correct all spelling mistakes. Ever heard of the glorious thing called "spellchecker" that exists in a very commonly used computer software called "Word"?
-Extend the word-count by at least a factor of six. Whats the point of living if you can't be bothered to do anything up to standard?
-Give more description about what your character is. So you are a "Dark Warrior of Chaos", WTF is that supposed to mean?
-Get Bent
Happy correcting.Edit: Actually, observing your age on your profile, I'll be a bit more lenient with my comments. hey Im 12 and when I wrote my story you liked it! Well you must be one of those 12 year olds with more intelligence than most of such I have seen amongst the netizen population. Many people's IQs seem to magically drop when they connect to the internet. |
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Post by sirveleno on May 3, 2012 7:43:25 GMT -5
lol. I too am 12 (my account says I'm 15 because I though 11 year olds weren't allowed lol.). I just find this a bit TOO short and LESS detailed. 30minutes - 1 hour may lead you somewhere.
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on May 3, 2012 9:45:23 GMT -5
lol. I too am 12 (my account says I'm 15 because I though 11 year olds weren't allowed lol.). I just find this a bit TOO short and LESS detailed. 30minutes - 1 hour may lead you somewhere. Yeah right you are 12-I will actually bet my organs you are not. |
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