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Post by mcelf on Oct 7, 2012 2:22:30 GMT -5
I was in the tree of the swamp peacefully until something happened. I woke up here in this world at first i though it was the same but when i explored it was not true. I met a fellow mage who help me. we had a hunt we killed monsters i was called the ender mage i am endite and i went in to the mines to find ore what i found was gold and 3 iron so i made a pick of iron and mined and that's till now i am Stevens.stent that
was story for now.
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Post by Serpine Flux on Oct 7, 2012 2:37:04 GMT -5
This sounds like an interesting character but a few problems. 1. 1 spelling error and a few grammer errors like i not being I. The spelling error is facing which you spelt faceting 2. So far in rp no one has been able to get into The End. 3. This is waaaay too short. As Zip would say ' Beeeef! Where's the BEEF There might be some other things that I haven't pointed out but I'm sure others will. Fix these and you'll be on you way to being Harriot.Sten. Good luck  P.S The thread name should be the name of your character. |
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on Oct 7, 2012 8:34:50 GMT -5
Unless if you are a servant of Warlock/Enderman refugee I can't see any reason why you would have come from Ender.
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Post by Ezio on Oct 7, 2012 8:48:44 GMT -5
You can't become an Endrite unless you are bless by Shezza97, Only true Endrite.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Oct 7, 2012 10:27:52 GMT -5
Too short and endrites are made when blessed by Shezza. Please correct.
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Post by fireblitz223 on Oct 14, 2012 5:13:42 GMT -5
Indeed a lot of errors and what the rest say of Shezza is true. Just fix the rp bio.
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