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Post by hippobannana on Oct 23, 2012 16:02:52 GMT -5
On the night of a full-ish moon, a baby was born with a FULL MULLET.His name was Kurt Narron. The baby was also ripped and beautiful! With the face with the beauty of a million lapis blocks! He then grew older, adopting his fathers ninja techniques! He also worked in his mother's shop and gained a lot of experience in trade. He then turned 18 and got ALL the ladies. He was living a wonderful life, nice hair, great women, heck! Even a shop of his own! He was the coolest guy in all of Mirugan. Then, everything changed when barbarians attacked... He was captured, and tortured and forced to do horrible things. But then he broke out, using his special ninja powers. He then went back to his shop to see that someone left him a chest FULL of lapis lazuli blocks! He then looked into a mirror to see that all of his glorious hair had been untouched and his looks are still the same. He then sought out to train to be a full fledged ninja... With a shop on the side....
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Post by Brindale on Oct 23, 2012 16:46:35 GMT -5
Brindale and Armendey might be paying you a trip to relieve you of your GLORIOUS lapis....
and leave hair cream.
On-Topic: I'm a bit lightheaded right now, but I'm still sure this wont get accepted due to "L01z, | iz teh @wes0mez"
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Post by kingmii on Oct 23, 2012 16:53:01 GMT -5
I like how its a bit funny, you just need to make it so its not to godmoddy, If I were you I would make him make him a hard outnarrsicist with slightly above avarage abilities like Johny bravo then this could be more how he sees himself than reality which would preserve the comedy.
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Post by Brindale on Oct 23, 2012 16:58:24 GMT -5
Btw, plagiarising Chuck Norris' bio will make you disappear.
Anyways, if this was serious, the whole "born with a full mullet" thing make people go "dafuq did I just read?" and makes them interpret this submission as satire.
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Post by joshivar on Oct 23, 2012 17:00:26 GMT -5
You FOOL! This is not Johnny Bravo...This is The Fonz. Thou shalt not attempt being as cool as the Fonz! You shall bring ruin upon us all! Other then that and the aforementioned God-Modding, I do enjoy this. Like Kingmii said, Tone it down just a bit and I'm sure you'll be alright. Somebody get this man a tight black t-shirt and stylish sunglasses!
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Post by hippobannana on Oct 23, 2012 17:49:55 GMT -5
look, the old non good bios of mine ive been told to put rp info into it, so i did. Yay!
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Post by Aura.Blackwind on Oct 24, 2012 15:24:55 GMT -5
Be realistic about it. Babies are born with hardly any hair, much less a full grown mullet. You also cannot just "pick up" any women you set your eyes on, as that would be god modding. Add details. HOW was he captured and not killed? WHAT horrible things was he forced to do? Answer questioning words like how, when, where, what, and possibly the most important, WHY. And if you had "special ninja powers", why didn't you just use those to break out as soon as you were caught, or just avoid capture all together? Be serious when writing a bio, otherwise I'm not likely to accept it. I hope you take what I've said into consideration this time and spend a lot more time reflecting and improving upon your bio rather than slapping one together in five minutes and begging me to read it every time you see me.
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Post by Marcel.Camthalion (TheGran) on Oct 24, 2012 18:05:41 GMT -5
Sounds A Little Too Good To Be True. Lengthen the bio as well maybe?
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Post by ZipZapMan on Oct 24, 2012 18:56:33 GMT -5
Lol, this seems like an ego boost for hippo here xD
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