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Post by darkwingg on Sept 25, 2012 22:43:57 GMT -5
my name is mirthen,argon i used to be a humble villager until the day the hostile mobs attacked so i grabbed my bow and arrows and killed as many mobs as i could before a creeper exploded burnt half my face that only made me more mad so i join other in slaying those fowl beast we where for are skills in combat joined knights i am the last of my battalion they where killed by creepers i lost my bow they gave me another but i said "no i only want my bow until i get it back i will only use a sword "my search has lead me here i promise you this i will get my bow back even if it kills me most likely it will but i still going to try
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Shawn Benoit
Experienced Miner
I AM FEAR AND FEAR FEARS NOTHING!
Posts: 312
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Post by Shawn Benoit on Sept 25, 2012 23:30:19 GMT -5
See the rules and guidelines, and then come back to this bio.
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Post by Orman Grandclaw on Sept 26, 2012 2:59:53 GMT -5
Ok...
1. Try to write it in English-use proper written English rather than "street grunting". This means that the word "ass" and variations thereof should appear with less frequency, punctuation should be used at appropriate places, and "I" should be spelt properly.
2. Try to expand the biography and give us more details. Why were you born in the "pain and suffer"? Who trained you to be a "merc"? What exactly did you family do?
3. Try treat this seriously, people on this server, funnily enough, do care about effort and presentation. Some of these people, like me, actually get irritated when this is not shown.
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Spwack
Veteran Explorer
70 years old, still going strong
Posts: 550
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Post by Spwack on Oct 1, 2012 23:57:05 GMT -5
It... burns...
AH, MY EYES!
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Post by darkwingg on Oct 4, 2012 16:53:40 GMT -5
ok what wrong with it
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bluejay51
Novice
I'll be watching...
Posts: 38
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Post by bluejay51 on Oct 5, 2012 0:06:28 GMT -5
Look at Orman's post, he has some good pointers.
Btw it hurts my brain reading what you have so far.
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Post by Rei.Blackwind on Oct 7, 2012 11:11:47 GMT -5
Um... Your bio confuses me in that it has very little biographical content. Please revise.
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Post by fireblitz223 on Oct 23, 2012 19:18:54 GMT -5
You should take a look at the accepted bios and see what they wrote and take some ideas from them. But do not what so ever copy anything that they wrote on there bio.
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samonman
Tree Puncher
I am the reason why they fear the dark...
Posts: 98
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Post by samonman on Oct 27, 2012 8:42:32 GMT -5
*Reads, then falls over dead, rises as a zombie and eats computer in order not to read this ever again
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