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Post by kodered on Oct 31, 2012 15:46:29 GMT -5
Kodatha.Swiftfire I was born in the cold lands I am used to the weather and along with my friends we often hid around the trees playing hide and seek, I had an unnatural ability though... I could walk right infront of them with out them noticing me it was very peculiar.. When I was older I uses that skill in my home town to steal from the baker then the armory and even the jewelry shop one day the mayor hired mages to try and find this theif and they caught me red handed with a diamond dagger in my hands, I quickly killed the mages and the mayor and ran from my parents my friends and everything I loved... I found a cave and sheltered there and came across iron I fashioned a stone pick and mined it with that iron I made an anvil and started crafting all day and night. With my new found skill I went wondering to find a new town and start over as a simple blacksmith never using those stealth skills again. Unless neeeded...
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Post by joshivar on Oct 31, 2012 16:02:28 GMT -5
Not even close man. This is just a name, there is no bio, no information whatsoever beyond that.
-edit- A little better, but like Zip said more info is always best.
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Post by ZipZapMan on Nov 1, 2012 10:34:21 GMT -5
Its a good start, but needs to be expanded some more. Fix up some grammar errors please.
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Post by Aura.Blackwind on Nov 3, 2012 15:34:34 GMT -5
Saying that you can stand in front of someone and they can't see you is clearly god modding (unless said person happens to be blind). Fix that and we'll see about accepting this.
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Post by ZipZapMan on Nov 4, 2012 16:31:31 GMT -5
The title should be the name of your character please. You need more details. Please do fix up some grammar errors.
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