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Post by joshivar on Nov 3, 2012 20:11:33 GMT -5
There's a little bit of godmodding in here buddy, but overall you seemed to favor survival over straight destruction, which is nice to see. Work on punctuation and grammar, you've got a good base here, now just mold it into something greater.
Good Luck.
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Post by joshivar on Nov 6, 2012 17:57:47 GMT -5
Creamy, that was uncalled for behavior and for all you know that person could actually have a case of mental retardation. This is neither amusing or cute to make fun of. Stay on topic.
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Post by deltajesus on Nov 6, 2012 19:06:03 GMT -5
Don't feed the trolls damnit.
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Post by creamofbread17 on Nov 6, 2012 22:49:15 GMT -5
im sorry for saying what i said but it just gets me angry when people make fun of or harm the mentally disabled its not their fault and i know hes not mentally challenged hes just a troll.
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Post by Marcel.Camthalion (TheGran) on Nov 7, 2012 4:31:49 GMT -5
Some godmodding. Good bio though
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Post by William.Sandavar on Nov 23, 2012 0:37:02 GMT -5
man i cant really say anything all of these bios im lookin at are alot longer and different form mine i just gave background info and made it sort of vague so u can create ur character more. Idk thats what i did. But i think it was well written just mehbeh to much talking
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Post by William.Sandavar on Nov 23, 2012 1:42:34 GMT -5
Well I enjoy it. But you should make an entire new thread and look over some grammar/ punctuation issues also you could add more info on the noble and your parents deaths. But hey im not an rp mod (or any type of mod) that's just my take on it. Very good job!
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Post by William.Sandavar on Nov 23, 2012 1:43:22 GMT -5
i also like the name more then the first one you came up with :3
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Post by bobruk on Nov 23, 2012 12:38:37 GMT -5
DO NOT make a new thread. Modify this one with your revised bio and say you updated it/fixed it. Grammatical errors and a you can't steal and beat someone without being caught. Fix that.
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Post by creamofbread17 on Nov 23, 2012 15:19:36 GMT -5
Name: Ronnie.Swift
Race: Human
Gender:male
Ronnie has always lived with his mother. His farther died some time before he was born. On his sixteenth birthday he got a bow from his mother who at the time owned a small farming establishment somewhere secret. He practiced with that bow till the string broke.
One day Ronnie was hunting when he found a mysterious stranger. The mysterious stranger told Ronnie that he must leave his mother's farm and leave with him so Ronnie followed him. When they reach the place they were supposed to be at the stranger told Ronnie he was his farther and he told Ronnie to stay here with his friend William.Sandavar. His farther said he will be back that was 3 years ago. Now Ronnie stay's with will training and sharpening his skills.
This is my Revised Bio
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