Tara Castillo- Character Bio submission

[lilmizse]

I was born a normal person, until i was given a very rare amulet by my great aunt who very sadly moved away and i have not heard from her since that day. I was worried and now i need to find her and i need to find about this rare amulet . It may take my whole life, but my life will have a meaning after i find out this vital information. There are a lot of things a need to do in so very little time.
I moved here with my parents and never fitted in for the first two years of my humble abode been located here. I still hope to make friends and find my life's meaning .

[joshivar]

Try adding a bit of personality to your character, you have a quest but no mind or soul behind it. Describe a journey or adventure, or an exciting lead you may have gotten that brought you to Central Mirugan. What happened to your parents, are they still around? Have they died? How are you not fitting in? The people of Rull are a generally accepting lot.

Few grammatical errors here and there, but otherwise keep it up.

[piwii999]

Where's the beef!©
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[ZipZapMan]

Nov 7, 2012 19:07:50 GMT -5 piwii999 said:

Where's the beef!©
*copyright zipzapman & co

ZipZapMan*

It's a good story, short, sweet, and to the point, kinda. It just needs some expanding with details such as Joshivar said. Good luck!


BTW: Moving this to the proper spot.