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Post by ebragg on Nov 13, 2012 18:07:54 GMT -5
It was an average day at the Singing Ghast(bar) drinking mead with friends and getting drunk off my butt. A few hours later I went home to my wife and we ate dinner. A small little cottage we lived in, not too big of a house. By the way my name's Ecan Forester, and I'm 29 years old. After a day at the bar and dinner with my wife, I thought the routine was getting a little bit too boring. I divorced my wife and traveled to Rull City, where I could make new friends. While at Rull City I went into an old warehouse and shot ice out of my hand. As crazy as it sounds it's true, I consulted the guide and he told me that I was a mage. I expanded my abilities to use for the better. I am still in training as of right now. I met some new friends and a new lady friend. The routine is different and that's the way I like it.
I fixed this one up as an older personality.
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Post by ZipZapMan on Nov 13, 2012 18:13:54 GMT -5
Title should be the name of your character. Grammar errors and such. Please fix.
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Post by kingmii on Nov 13, 2012 18:37:40 GMT -5
I don't feel like I got to know your character from this, although the basic premise is fine and I wouldn't change the story I would talk about who you were before you found out about your powers and how you reacted to finding them in more detail. Also you must have an interesting relationship with your parents to set out into the world at the tender age of 13
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Post by Rowan.Pelanger on Nov 13, 2012 18:47:59 GMT -5
It sounds too modern and like something you'd write in 4th grade. Usually, children are harder to RP as. Read some accepted bios and look at the server lore. This should be more like what you'd write if you we're to present it to the President or the Queen or Prime Minister or whatever you have in your country, not what you use as jot notes for your English essay in 6th grade.
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Post by Aura.Blackwind on Nov 13, 2012 20:04:28 GMT -5
As stated above, I would suggest reading some of the other accepted character bios. Being a child is also not really recommended, but you can give it a shot if you wish. I would suggest making yourself at least 16-18, so that people take you some what seriously.
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