Jackasaurusrex31's Character Bio(Real one!)

[jackasaurusrex31]

Ri'manan.Alexander

As a young Endrite he was always fascinated with the pearls, oh how he loved them. One cloudy day he saw a portal, filled with fire and the sounds of howling creatures. He was holding the pearl that he loved so, when he venture to close to it. The portal sucked him in and as it did, the pearl merged with his eye, creating an Eye of Ender. Ever since then, they have been used to get to his dimension.
Though he did have a brother, but he chose a different path. A twin brother.

[piwii999]

This story is not cohesive AT ALL. Try to make it in chronological order. Other than that is is fine. Grammar good, spelling great, makes sense not so much

[ZipZapMan]

You're missing backround history of your character. So what I get from this, is your character is in another world at the time. You're missing age and small details like that. Try adding those in.