flapperj22 Charicter Bio

[flapperj22]

Ri'manan. Ogar
When i was a young boy my brother and i would play together in the forest, which feels like my home, but he choose a different path as i choose to be an elf, bucease my father was an elf and as i was natrually born as one but my brother ,alexander was an enderite becuase my mother was an endrite now we work together to unite the two
races. i was brought to Central Mirgan by my parents becuase my brother had gotten infected by an enderman, and we had to be seperated many years later we met up again in Central Mirguan ecept he was an Endrite becauase the ender infection had grown deeper. me tho was an elf becuase of my elf father. we both took the path of the rouge. i was seeking to become a ninja


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[bobruk]

Title needs to be First.Last name. Capitalize I and everything else that needs to be. Some other grammatical. The race differences doesn't make any sense, since an endrite is a blessed race by Shezz.Raulo, who in turn does it in the name of Terminus. So change that a mother and brother that's also an Elf. Endemen don't cause you to be an Endrite, as state above. Also, try not to incoporate Heroes in the bio so much. If you do, explain WHY you want to be a ninja.

[ZipZapMan]

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